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Coal truck

This is the coal truck Barney and other coal miners are being taken back to Phoenix in. They would be sat in the back, maybe cross-legged as it's designed more for transporting coal rather than people. Some miners would possibly sit with rags to keep them warm on the colder days whereas on warmer days some would sit with their shirts open or not on at all for the long journey home from the coal mine in the North of Arizona.

Box Art

Image in bottom right is stolen...
BUT IT WILL BE REDESIGNED AS COLEEN.
Just an idea...

Barney and Coleen Daniels

Carnell 'Ivory' Taylor Jr.

I've given Ivory a real name as well, I felt like he deserved one.

But no one else has learned his real name, because no one cares enough, to them he's just the black piano player, which is where he earned the name Ivory. No one knows his real age, not even he does anymore, Barney is the only thing he's got in this world close to a friend.

Amelia Brown

Just some different perspectives of the character Amelia Brown. Colour pencil and berol fine with water wash for the grey colours.

REMOTEX

Coleen Daniel's

Coleen's face:

She has quite a youthful face

Small button nose

Innocent, childlike eyes

Soft heart shape

Prominent cheekbones

Makeup:

Coleen prefers a minimalistic approach towards makeup which will add to the innocence of her character. (Not a full face with bright red lipstick and eyes lined heavily with kohl) 

Hair: 

Auburn brown 

Pin-straight blunt bob, falls just below her chin and has a middle parting.

Tone:

She's fair skinned, quite pale.

Eye colour:

Hazel (green and brown)

Barney Daniels' monologue

Context for Barney’s monologue

Barney’s monologue is the first voice you’ll hear when playing Spotlight. It’s an introduction into the story giving the player a bit of backstory and context. The scene is Barney travelling back from his place of work, the coal mine in the north of Arizona where he takes trips to and works from a few days up to a week at a time. We learn that he has high hopes for his daughter, he’s devoted to helping her but he’s come across hard times after being made redundant as a coal miner. However the positive way in which he’s speaking implies he has other sources of money.

Barney Daniels monologue draft #1 - 104 words

Last year my wife Betty passed away, leaving our only daughter and I alone living in phoenix. This last year has been hard on our Coleen, on me too. The coal mine is in decline due to the rise in oil use, fancy automobiles and such. The future doesn’t look so good for it, that’s probably why they’ve laid me off. “You’re too old” they said, “you’re a danger to others”, well I’ve got plenty of life in me yet and I’ll devote every breathing minute of it to help my Coleen – OUR Coleen. It’s what Betty would’ve wanted and it’s what Coleen deserves.

Barney Daniels monologue draft #2 – 158 words

Last year Betty died, my wife, a lifetime gone in only a few moments. Now it’s just me and our daughter Coleen. It’s been a hard year for me and Coleen. The coal mine is going bust ‘cos of everything running on oil these days, fancy automobiles and such. The future don’t look so good for the ol’ coal mine, that’d be why they’ve laid me off. “You’re too old” they said, “You’re a danger to others”, well I’ve got plenty of life in me yet and I’ll be puttin’ all I got into helping my Coleen – OUR sweet lil’ Coleen. She wants to be a singer and I’ll bet her chances are good as long as I help her get there. I wish Betty could still be here to see it happen, ‘cos I know it will. I’m gonna put all I can into getting her there, it’s what Betty would’ve wanted and it’s what Coleen deserves.

Coleen's dress

Here you can see the front, side and back views of Coleen's dress. It's got thin fabric for pleats, which falls from below the hips, so you can't see a defined feminine shape.

Colours of Coleen

 Colours of Coleen's dress to choose from, which colour suits her and the 20s theme appropriately... I liked the red toned dress but ended up choosing the grey and lilac.

Barney (below)

...more logo ideas

(Just briefly and quickly messing around with the logo)

Dorothy Black

-Dorothy Black 

-Dancer/Singer

-Late 20s 

-Stuck up 

- Dating rich man

Amelia Brown

This is Amelia Brown, one of the choir girls in Robbie's Club and a friend to Coleen Daniels.

Coleen Daniels

Hey yo yo it's ya gurl Coleen Daniels. 

Wots da deal wots da deal, tell me wots da deal:

-Coleen
-27
-Aspiring singer
-Likes to be lavished
-Works in an office to support her singing career
-Father, Barney Daniels

remotex

Remotex is a fake game designing company made up of 8 illustrators and graphic designers. Working on their first game 'Spotlight'.

Below is the blurb to the storyline.

    "Downtown Phoenix 1926. Barney Daniels is a widowed coal miner with a daughter, Coleen, an aspiring singer. In times of prohibition, Barney and Coleen become trapped when they get involved with the unlawful speakeasy known as “Robbie’s Club”. An unexpected death turns Coleen’s world upside down and her dreams become compromised."