Tuesday, 30 October 2012

Barney Daniels' monologue



Context for Barney’s monologue

Barney’s monologue is the first voice you’ll hear when playing Spotlight. It’s an introduction into the story giving the player a bit of backstory and context. The scene is Barney travelling back from his place of work, the coal mine in the north of Arizona where he takes trips to and works from a few days up to a week at a time. We learn that he has high hopes for his daughter, he’s devoted to helping her but he’s come across hard times after being made redundant as a coal miner. However the positive way in which he’s speaking implies he has other sources of money.




Barney Daniels monologue draft #1 - 104 words

Last year my wife Betty passed away, leaving our only daughter and I alone living in phoenix. This last year has been hard on our Coleen, on me too. The coal mine is in decline due to the rise in oil use, fancy automobiles and such. The future doesn’t look so good for it, that’s probably why they’ve laid me off. “You’re too old” they said, “you’re a danger to others”, well I’ve got plenty of life in me yet and I’ll devote every breathing minute of it to help my Coleen – OUR Coleen. It’s what Betty would’ve wanted and it’s what Coleen deserves.

Barney Daniels monologue draft #2 – 158 words

Last year Betty died, my wife, a lifetime gone in only a few moments. Now it’s just me and our daughter Coleen. It’s been a hard year for me and Coleen. The coal mine is going bust ‘cos of everything running on oil these days, fancy automobiles and such. The future don’t look so good for the ol’ coal mine, that’d be why they’ve laid me off. “You’re too old” they said, “You’re a danger to others”, well I’ve got plenty of life in me yet and I’ll be puttin’ all I got into helping my Coleen – OUR sweet lil’ Coleen. She wants to be a singer and I’ll bet her chances are good as long as I help her get there. I wish Betty could still be here to see it happen, ‘cos I know it will. I’m gonna put all I can into getting her there, it’s what Betty would’ve wanted and it’s what Coleen deserves.

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